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Woman and men are commonly seen as having different strength and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?

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There is no doubt that these days
female
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females
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 and
male
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males
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 are equal in rights in everything. But the question is, is it right to assign men and women
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particular tasks according to their abilities? In
this
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 essay, I am going to study
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 phenomenon from my own view. In terms of some views, there are people
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 that males and females must
given
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 the same tasks as they are equal and they can do the same
jobs
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. The main reason given to support
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 claim is that
work
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 law does not specify certain
jobs
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 for both
gender
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,
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, it gives
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women some benefits regard
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motherhood vacation and breastfeeding,
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, both
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gender
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genders
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 can gate the same opportunities to be what they want if they do the required effort to do that. To illustrate, there are enormous companies in the United States
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 as NASA, Facebook, and Google, they can employ any person to do any
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 as long as
he
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 able to do that regardless of his
gender
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.
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, it can be looked
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 the matter with the opposite case.
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, males and females have many
of
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weak and
strength
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strong
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 points and
this
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depended
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by
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the
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scientific research.
In other words
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, can use every
gender
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 in
the
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 suitable situation.
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, the women are excellent in analytical
jobs
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, while the men are excellent in training
jobs
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 and human sources.
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, companies can
work
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 into improving skills and experience their employees,
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 they have to recommencement their
work
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 with the talented staff. In conclusion, as we
seen
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, there is no
an
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easy answer
for
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to
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this
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 question,
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, I tend to believe that every
gender
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 should
to
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occupy the appropriate position for him
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then
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 get promoted to the
next
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 level after training and testing.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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