Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic. Nowadays more people are choosing to live with friends or alone rather than with their families. This trend is likely to have a negative impact on communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

In recent years many
people
prefer to spend their lives alone or with
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friends
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fiends
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friends
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rather than with their own families.
This
particular trend is impacting negatively on communities. I completely agree with
this
notion because
people
who are living without their families are the ones who are suffering from major psychological issues.
Furthermore
, when they choose to live
their
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friends
then
most of the
people
are indulged in different
activities
.
Family
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comprises
of
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various individuals who have strong relationships with each other. Despite the fact that family is a support system, most
of
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the
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people
desire to live alone or with their
friends
which is giving negative results among the communities.
Firstly
, when
people
choose to live alone
then
they have no one to talk to them or listen to them . Most of the time they follow the same routine due to which they become
stressful
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, anxious and depressed. These psychological disorders
sometime
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sometimes
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lead to suicide.
For instance
, there was an article about suicides in which it was written that most of the
people
especially youth end their lives because they go through hard times and when they are not able to manage the situation
then
at
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last
they take their lives.
Secondly
, when
people
live with their
friends
then
they mostly get indulged in different unethical
activities
due to peer pressure.
For example
,
use
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of drugs is prohibited in Islam,
however
, when there is a group of
friends
they force each other to do various
activities
which
gives
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them pleasure.
This
affects
community
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the community
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in
a
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the
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wrong way. In a
nut shell
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, when
people
prefer to live alone or with
friends
rather than their family
then
it affects
community
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the community
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in a negative way because they sometimes suffer from psychological disorders and
also
get into various
sort
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of
activities
which have consequences in later life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • independent living
  • personal growth
  • self-reliant
  • social networks
  • community bonds
  • traditional family structures
  • extended family
  • urban communities
  • innovation
  • creativity
  • isolation
  • emotional support
  • stability
  • collective resilience
  • economic disparities
  • housing costs
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