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Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

#businesses #employees #lack #skills
In order to
work
 in a corporate world or just
a normal office
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normal office work
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work
, common skills are mandatory.
However
, many employers believe that a number
new
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of new
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employees
 could not able to gel with the old
one
. There might be
a
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apply
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plenty of reasons
to
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apply
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not to cooperate and in order to avoid that situation, the employer
shold
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should
 create a friendly
environment
 for the new
employee
. Many
employees
 leave their job within probation period only, because they could not cope up with the office
environment
 or sometimes due to the
colleauges'
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colleague's
colleagues
colleges
 behaviour. Many old
employees
 have that feeling of seniority and try to impose their seniority on to the new
one
. Some crowd are not able to take that behaviour and try to keep the distance from the old staff which results in old and new
employee
's group. Some
company
 has the old policy to
work
 in
such
 a manner and when new
employee
join
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 with the new idea, the
company
 do not accept them which made the new joinee feel like
isloated
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isolated
 from the existing
one
. Other reasons for
exmaple
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example
, old staff often bully the new
one
 and sometimes they
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afraid
affraid
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are affraid
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 that the new
emplyee
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employee
 will go
further
, they try to sabotage their progress
also
.
Nonetheless
, employers think that the new
employees
 are not able to cooperate with the
company
. In order to, solve
this
 unfair behaviour towards
new
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the new
a new
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employee
, the
company
 should have
clear
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a clear
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 policy to keep their
company
's
environment
 friendly and jolly so that
new
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the new
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emplyee
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employee
employees
 does not take time to adapt there and do not even think to change his job and be more productive at his
work
. Seniors should show
the
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their
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 diversity and not only
to
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apply
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teach them but try to learn the new trend or new technologies from the new
one
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ones
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.
Every
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one
 had
this
first
 day at
work
 experience so they should try to make it easy for the new
one
. In conclusion, if the
company
 provides the correct
work space
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workspace
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 and
the
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a
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 positive
environment
, each new and old
emplyee
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employee
employees
 would cooperate
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each other
eachother
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with eachother
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.
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