The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress levels amongst professionals in eight groups. Describe the information shown to a university or collage lecturer.
#graphs #show #figures #hours #stress #levels #professionals #eight #groups #information #university #collage #lecturer
The bar
chart
illustrates the average amount of worked time in eight different professions while
the pie chart
depicts the rates of its
stress levels. All in all, it is obvious that businessmen and movie producers work more by far Correct pronoun usage
apply
compare
to other groups Wrong verb form
compared
while
the worked
times of chefs and Replace the word
working
lecturers
are at
Change preposition
in
last
place. However
, the
prevalence of stress-related illness is more common in Correct article usage
apply
lecturers
and lawyers and it is so rare for writers. Regarding the bar chart
, a businessman works generally 70 hours
per week and movie producers works
ten Correct subject-verb agreement
work
hours
less than them. The figures for doctors and writers amounted to nearly 50 and 45 hours
, relatively. The average number of programmers is 40 hours
and the last
two groups, chefs and lecturers
working Change noun form
lecturers'
lecturer's
hours
are close, at around 30 hours
. As for the pie chart
, the lecturers
are the most suffering group from stress and accounted for 25 percent
and subsequent groups movie producers and doctors made up 26 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
, collectively. The rates of chefs and Change the spelling
per cent
business man
are close Correct your spelling
businessman
each
other at around 10 Change preposition
to each
percent
and slightly less than one in ten people who is a writer suffering from stress. The figure for programmers constituted only 5 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
.Change the spelling
per cent
Submitted by meliike.bekcii on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
▼
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
▼
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
▼
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, lecturers, hours, percent with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
▼