The advantages of robots doing the basic serving functions in the entertainment, leisure and retail sectors of the economy outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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qualities
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technologies
and good development,
robots
nowadays
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an important
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in human
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lives
life
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too. Compared to the drawbacks as the development is conducive to various domains. Of
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it’s clearly help a
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in employee life but it’s
also
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with quite a lots of disadvantages. At the face of value, many factories start to use
robots
to help their employees in their working process. Those are called the produce machines, their
also
many
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machines like the
robots
which are
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to build cars. They can do many basic functions or
selling
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tickets some others can
also
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foods
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and drinks, these
robots
perform as
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entertainment leisure and retail workers. But what will happen when the customers
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or complain about it? The answer probably is no.
This
is one of the big disadvantages of service
robots
and sometimes
robots
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. On the
internet
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their
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are many deaths course from
robots
or machines.
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amount of disposable income for leisure pursuits. In summary, everything
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it’s limited
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advantages. And hopefully in the future technologies can be more improvement. In my opinion, and be ultimately detrimental to the service they are offering.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Efficiency
  • Productivity
  • Precision
  • Reliability
  • Novelty
  • Customer satisfaction
  • Displacement
  • Empathetic
  • Personalized interaction
  • Initial investment
  • Deploying
  • Feasible
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