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The diagrams below show the coastal village of Seaville in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The diagrams below show the coastal village of Seaville in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The diagram illustrates how a village called Seaville has developed over the
last
 30 years.
Although
 There have been several changes, the most noticeable being increases in urbanisation, introducing
recreational
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 facilities and replacing separate properties. In 1980,in the southern part of the ,
sea
 there was a
hotel
 situated
while
 on the northwest
side
 of it
is
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are
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 holiday cottages. ,
Nevertheless
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 the rest of the area was a marsh,
next
 to that property is Woodland. As for the southeast part of the
sea
, the first thing we run into is a tea room and just beyond it, here lies the sand dune. On the northeast
side
 of the sand dunes east bank is situated. Cross the way, going straightly river is located. In 2010, we can observe
strengthening
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 in the number of
the
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people by recognising the fact that,despite the holiday cottages and marsh ,
this
 area was intended for the citizens and permanent houses were built,
although
hotel
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the hotel
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 stays untouched,it seems the location of
it
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the it
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 slightly changed to the south. In order to attract more individuals, woodland was replaced by a golf course. As for the southeast
side
 of the
sea
, more leisure facilities
was
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were
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 built,
such
 as a restaurant on the southeast
side
 of the
sea
 and
next
 to it, an additional
hotel
 was built. In the northeast
of
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the
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, a
hotel
 bolt club was placed with a retirement village
next
 to it. East bank did stay still with additional infrastructure called holiday cottages. The
next
 sentence is just to finish the word requirement of
course
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the course
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although, next".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sea, hotel, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stays" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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