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Some people believe that all companies’ decisions should be decided by managers, while others think that it is better to include employees in decision making. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

#people #companies’ #decisions #managers #employees #decision
It is clear technology have a huge effect on everything and change our lives in many ways especially our handwriting, nowadays we use computer programmes to write our essays, lectures and even letters,
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 with artificial intelligence, they make our works much easier. they have an
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 to that it has text to speech technology, you can speak your sentences
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 the computer write it down for you really fast. In recent years there is an open debate about the disadvantages of using advanced technology by our children in
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 education system. It may
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 their literacy and many of them have
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 of the words
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 creditable universities still use handwriting tests for examination
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, for teaching the vocabularies and their
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 we must teach students the structure of writing by hands.
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, many people believe in the cyber future we don’t need handwriting because everyone has their own computers and for our environment, It is better to become a paperless society, we don’t need to cut down trees for making papers. As result,
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 handwriting is going obsolete. Sooner or later we should adapt
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 to the new
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technology
 to become more productive in the fast-paced future. In conclusion, despite the fact, we
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 dependent on paper and we must learn appropriate handwriting skills.
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 we should
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 about the new perspective and the new demand in our society and be
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 for a revolution in our handwriting and our
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communication
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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