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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts compare the mean proportion of
sodium
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, saturated fats and added sugars in American daily meals, which may be unhealthy to the body if ingest too much. It is noticeable that the food consumed
in
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for
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dinner
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 provides the highest proportion of
sodium
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 and saturated fat among the four types of meals,
while
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snacks
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 have the highest percentage of added
sugar
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.
By contrast
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,
breakfast
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 seems to have the smallest amount of these three nutrients.
Dinner
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 provides the largest daily
sodium
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 intake with 43%, followed by lunch
contributes
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 to 29% of
sodium
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whereas
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breakfast
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 and
snacks
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 have the same amount of
sodium
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 ingestion with 14%. Meanwhile,
dinner
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also
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 provides the highest saturated fat at 37%
while
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 lunch,
breakfast
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 and
snacks
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 contribute 26%，21% and 16% respectively. Moving to the
everyday
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every day
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 added
sugar
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 intake, unlike the other two nutrients,
snacks
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 are the highest source to provide added
sugar
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, compared to the other three typical meals which contribute to approximately the same percentage of
sugar
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, with 23%(
dinner
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), 19%(lunch) and 16%(
breakfast
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).

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, dinner, snacks, sugar, breakfast with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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