The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate numerical data of British students in a UK university who were able to speak additional foreign
languages
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in 2 years: 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, Spanish is the most common
language
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learned in both years followed by French in 2000. Interestingly, students who were able to speak one or two other minor
languages
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contributes to approximately one-
third
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of all variables. Focusing on the statistic in the year 2000, the highest known
language
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other than English was Spanish with 30 per
cent
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and
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behind by 10 per
cent
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lesser was people who were not able to speak any foreign
languages
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. 15 per
cent
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can speak either only French or another
language
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. The rest,
however
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, spoke
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only German or two other
languages
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. Turning to in 2010,
likewise
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, Spanish dominated with 35 per
cent
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; meanwhile, 20 per
cent
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was from bilinguals and followed
up with
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15 per
cent
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of people capable of two other
languages
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.
On the other hand
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, French, German, or students with no extra knowledge of
language
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occupies 10 per
cent
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of the
overall
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words languages, language, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • multilingualism
  • globalisation
  • immigration
  • education policy
  • career prospects
  • cultural understanding
  • distribution
  • percentage
  • increased/decreased
  • significant
  • trends
  • shifts
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