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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Other value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.

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In modern society, the freedom of clothing has been becoming being accepted at
work
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. While there is a belief at the organisation level that employees should dress smartly, others think that the quality of
work
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 outweighs their
appearance
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. It is clear that
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 the
appearance
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 may not affect their performance, employees need to wear neat
clothes
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 when they
work
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. The
first
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 aspect to point out is that wearing adequate
clothes
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 can give
customers
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 a good impression. Most workers need to meet their
customers
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 at some point and the
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 impression from the
customers
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 has a great impact on their businesses.
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, if a doctor's
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 was unkempt, patients would not feel comfortable because it might give them a negative image in terms of hygienic.
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 would affect the doctor's reputation even though they have excellent skills in surgery.
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, it could be suggested that one's knowledge and experience of their job cannot be judged by their
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.
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, teachers do not have their uniforms at
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,
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, they wear their ordinary
clothes
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. Students tend to see their abilities of coaching by their knowledge rather than their
appearance
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.
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, some may state that the quality of
work
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 is above
appearance
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. To conclude, despite the fact that employees cannot be judged their performance by their
appearance
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, the impressions from their
customers
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 have a great impact on their businesses in both positive and negative manners.
Therefore
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, workers should wear adequate
clothes
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 at
work
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionalism
  • first impression
  • competent
  • dedicated
  • organizational culture
  • teamwork
  • creativity
  • productivity
  • dress code
  • comfort
  • individuality
  • job satisfaction
  • client-facing
  • nature of the job
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