The tourist industry has grown enormously over the last fifty years and there are few places which are unaffected by it. However, tourism rarely benefits the countries which tourists visit. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

over the past decades the rate at which people tour has increased tremendously. most individuals visit different
countries
in
persuit
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pursuit
of recreation, relaxation and pleasure.
the
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society
argue
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that the destination places are of no advantages to
such
events. others
also
suggest that the pros of that activity
outweighs
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the cons. I completely disagree with the opinion that
tourism
hardly
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the destination
countries
. to start with,
this
activity increases the
countries
economy.
although
tourism
is resource-intensive, most
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rely on it as their source of revenue and employment.
for instance
, Maldive in the
Indean
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Indian
ocean relies on
tourism
as its largest industry. it is one of the most visited places in the world and a key driver to poverty reduction in the country. most foreigners who move to different
countries
to tour
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either dollars or pounds. when they get to where they will land, they exchange their money for the local money.
this
helps the local government to get a lot of foreign money to purchase goods. to add to the
first
point, it creates employment. many hotels, restaurants and beaches hire a lot of workers due to the influx of
tourist
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.
moreover
,
this
event
also
increases the infrastructures of a country. in most cases, areas where those people
visits
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most have good roads, hospitals, schools and adequate water and electricity supply.
however
,
although
tourism
benefits both the government and individuals at those sites, it has
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own disadvantages. it could lead to air pollution, environmental pollution and
also
social crimes
such
as drunkenness, public sex and robbery. in conclusion, many places rely on
tourism
as a source of revenue and employment. unfortunately, it could
also
be a source of problems if not managed well. in my opinion,
this
event is helpful to both the government and destination areas and
hence
it must be well regulated.
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