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Because many children are not able to learn foreign languages, schools should not force them to learn foreign languages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#children #languages #schools #force
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Most schools globally add
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 as a compulsory subject. That has some benefits, but occasionally it leads to nothing, only wastes their time. There is something to be said for compelling studying a foreign
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 at school. Learning a foreign
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 is better if starting learning as soon as possible. It helps children can master
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another
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 behind their native linguistic. A new
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 helps
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 could integrate into other cultures, extend their knowledge. They would be easygoing to find good jobs in the future.
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 the reason why Singapore,
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 of the developed countries in the world still maintains Chinese as a compulsory in their general education behind English.
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 is a big advantage for Singapore citizens in the labour market when they can cooperate with both American, Western Countries and Chinese – a large market in the world.
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, I
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 believe that forcing
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language
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 at school is unnecessary. As a mother, a teacher, have you ever seen your
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 who are good at Math, History but not good at Literature, Geography? I think people have some compensations but
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 have some drawbacks. So, we cannot compulsory all
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 to learn
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 foreign
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. Studying an elective subject would encourage
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 in studying and promote their ability. It doesn’t waste their time
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 unwanted subjects. I agree that learning foreign languages at schools is necessary.
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 should be an elective subject. I suppose that
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 have the right to choose their loving culture.
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