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big salary is more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagre?

#salary #job #satisfaction #disagre
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people
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 are earning
money
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 . Salary is much more important than
job
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satisfaction
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. These phases mostly focused on
people
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 mindset about their
job
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satisfaction
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 and
money
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 that they have earned from their jobs. There is the conflict that arises between both of the parameters of high remuneration is more important compared to a sense of
job
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 fulfilment. I fully disagree with
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 aspect because lack of
job
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satisfaction
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causes
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 results in health complications and loss of jobs
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 of all,
money
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 is a necessity of the span of life.
People
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 are earning throughout the span of life for betterment and growth of lifestyle. Nowadays
people
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 are buying branded clothes which are only bought by the mean of
money
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. They are not thinking about their
job
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satisfaction
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 . They are only in need of
money
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 which
causes
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 a
result
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 of inner
satisfaction
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 and showoff to society. They are mainly focused on their lifestyle what they have eaten, what they have to wear , whether they have to live in their society. The high amount of remuneration
causes
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 a
result
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 of sacrificing their basic duties. They just have to earn a high amount of
money
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instead
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 of their
workplace
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, their preferences.
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,
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causes
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 a
result
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 loss of
job
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 , health complications like anxiety, depression which cause a
result
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 of heart attack For , examples
people
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 are working in banking industries and multinational companies provide better salaries for their work but they are not providing a good atmosphere to their employees. Due to
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 fact , some
people
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 are committed suicide. In conclusion in
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 paragraph ,
job
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satisfaction
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 and a healthy
workplace
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 are much more important than a higher amount of salary .
People
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 will earn more and more
money
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's and will Get their promotion only possible whenever they are happier in their
workplace
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. The basic goal of
people
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 is to earn
money
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 with their
job
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satisfaction
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 and a healthy environment in their
workplace
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