Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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time
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is a part of life and each individual reacts to
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a situation
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situation
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situations
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based on their own experience. Some
people
give up under given circumstances and accept the minion job and poverty as
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fate of their life.
However
, other
people
do
work
hard and give maximum to improve their financial situation. I personally believe that it is always rewarding
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the end if
people
give their best and
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to augment their job satisfaction level and financial independence. Some
people
do not believe in
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and keep continue to
work
under
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and impoverished
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conditions
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to
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their
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rest of life.
One
of
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for
this
is, they have never seen any close relative or friend, who has become rich by hard
work
.
Therefore
, these
people
accept the circumstances and do not expect anything unexpected.
For example
, during my childhood, I have seen a family whose paternal business was artisanship and hardly meet their end. Even at present time, they still
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as
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artisans. Because
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they think that
this
is their fate and no
one
can
change
it.
On the other hand
, other
people
believe in
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the power
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of hard
work
and
change
their fate or get the dream job by putting efforts continuously until
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the rewards.
For instance
, Sunder
Picchai
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Pichai
, an Indian origin, is the CEO of Google, who some 20 years ago, immigrated to The US as a student. He had the vision to become successful and to achieve
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in his professional career.Now, he is
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highest
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paid CEO worldwide. I personally believe that situation can be changed and improved based on your attitude of never
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up. As per
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saying, if you
born
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poor, it’s not your fault but if you die poor, it’s your fault. To conclude, there are two types of
people
in the world.
One
, who
do
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not believe in hard
work
and
hence
, do not find
change
in their lives over generation and
secondly
, there are
people
who strongly believe in
change
and with hard
work
and eager to improve
financial
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condition, they keep
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hard until
get
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the dream true.
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