When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that the most crucial priority in selecting a

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is the salary. From my point of view, I disagree with

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idea, because there are many different aspects affecting worker’s selection. The purpose when choosing the

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should be prioritized. In

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contemporary society, while several

people

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still struggle with making money,

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others

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can have a high standard of living;

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materialistic

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is not always important, there are

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several things

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that should

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be considered,

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experience, admiration, the demand

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sacrificing and so on.

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, if

people

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having good

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need to find a

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, they can possibly choose a startup due to its prospect in the future, despite

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a low wage.

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, a company with a high salary would offer a large

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of skills and major time at work. Indeed, when the figure of employees

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dramatically, the rate of recruiting

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drop significantly especially in

big

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company.

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means

people

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need to not only have

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regarding their major

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but

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be attractive and useful in the employers’ eyes.

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, most

people

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do not have an opportunity to meet these

demand

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demands

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then

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they

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waste a huge amount of time to recruit in

large

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company

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companies

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, in these corporations,

people

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should be able to work hard and produce

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effective

result

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results

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, so it is not always suitable for anyone. In conclusion, prioritizing the salary when selecting work can possibly cause several disadvantages, because

people

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with many

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have many different

purpose

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in choosing a

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, and the difficulty employing in big companies.

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Topic Vocabulary:

consideration
sole factor
financial stability
security
motivating factor
dissatisfaction
demotivation
job satisfaction
overall well-being
fulfillment
work-life balance
flexible working hours
vacations
career growth opportunities
skill development
advancement
determining factor

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Art classes, such as painting and drawing, are as important for children's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high school. Do you agree or disagree?

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Computers and A.I technology are increasingly being used for online education. Can artificial intelligence enhance the learning experience ? Is this a positive or negative development ?

Some people think our first impression of someone is important, while others think we should not judge another person so quickly and should take our time to know them better. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

The current trend in education is to move away from traditional exams and instead have continuous assessment over the school year? what did you think of this trend ?