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In some schools and universities, girl tend to choose art subjects(e.g literature) and boys tend to choose science subjects(e.g physics).Why do you think this is so? Should this tendency be changed? Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, we can see that in some educational places
such
 as schools and universities, girls prefer to choose literature and art subjects.
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 boys tend to choose science subjects.
This
 essay disagrees with
this
 statement and I believe that
this
 tendency should be replaced.
First
 of all, the main reason that forces me to disagree with
this
 statement is the fact that all human individuals and should be able to choose their major subjects despite society judgment. Because it is a well-known fact that in our society considers women's less suitable choice for works connecting with science.
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,
time
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 to time woman's can not obtain appropriate occupations only because of their gender.
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world statistics only 20 per cent of
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women
womans
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women
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working
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 on the job in the science sphere while
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others
another's
anothers
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 work in the spheres
such
 as art, tourism, and literature.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gender roles
  • Stereotypes
  • Societal norms
  • Bias
  • Influence
  • Role models
  • Peers
  • Expectations
  • Inclination
  • Aptitude
  • Preferences
  • Competitive/Collaborative environment
  • Educational system
  • Subject choice
  • Disparity
  • Encouragement
  • Inherent abilities
  • Career prospects
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