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Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certaion professions because of their gender? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the modern world,
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 equality is becoming a very hot topic in every part of society.
Women
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 and
men
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 have the right to choose
gender
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 freely. In general,
women
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 and
men
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 have different strengths and weaknesses. Even though they have common points in some areas, excluding them in their professions because of their
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 is
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 discrimination. In my point of view, males and females should get the same chances in society. On the one hand, we think that
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 are stronger than
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 according to their body structure.
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 kind of mindset has been in all ages back in thousand years. Nowadays, some company they have rules and regulations for
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 equality in every layer of the company.
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, the percentage of
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 has been very large in blue worker job which is using physical to get work done. People prefer that kind of job is for males and females are very soft to do.
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,
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 get more posts
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 as a kindergarten teacher or nanny. Shop owners think that if they have male employees people won't come to their school or to their shop. Once my friend said that he failed the interview as a beautician because of the wrong sex. To sum up,
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 some occupations are female- or male-dominant, there are more advantages to allowing both
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. It would be better to encourage equality of job opportunities between
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 and
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. People should carefully consider how the jobs affect
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 and
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 before excluding them from certain professions.
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