Some people argue that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while others believe that they cannot always expect job satisfaction, and a permanent job is more important. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

in
reccent
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recent
decades,
people
are working harder than before and spend most of their
time
on earning
money
.some individuals believe that
job
satisfaction is a significant element in each work.
however
,some commentators argue that having a permanent
job
is more important than
job
satisfactoin
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satisfaction
.there is a
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of reasons on both sides which I will explain here. on the one hand,
people
spend most of their
time
on their
job
nowadays. contentment of
job
plays a significant role in their lives.
therefore
, they take their responsibility in
better
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a better
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way.
for example
, if
doctores
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doctors
love what
their
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doing ,they can take care
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of patient
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patient
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patients
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in
good
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way.
in addition
,
people
s real potential and creativity are found by
job
satisfaction.
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most of the
time
,
enterprnures
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enterprises
are arrival after they discover their potential and have been brought up by a new idea.all of the successful
people
such
as ilan musk ,Edison,mike
zakerberg
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Zuckerberg
,love what
their
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doing so they make
a
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anormous
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enormous
change in the world .
Artituctures
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Architectures
can be
anothert
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another
example.
thay
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they
can manifest their souls and build
a great mansions
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a great mansion
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which we can see in ancient
dynastier
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dynasties
like china and japan.
on the other hand
,
firstly
,
money
become a controversial
topice
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topic
among communities nowadays.they are worried about their expenditures and try to
preper
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prepare
a comfortable life for their family.
for example
,in some countries
such
as Iran or China , men are a breadwinner in societies so,
job
security
is become
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more important than
job
contentment.even they force to get two or three
job
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jobs
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at the same
time
for earning
money
.
in addition
old
people
believe that any strange
circumpstanses
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circumstances
might be
occured
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occurred
suddenly,
such
as
variouse
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various
types of disease or car accident which can
parelize
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paralyze
people
.
therefore
, they can earn
money
in that way easily.
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conclusion
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a conclusion
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,communities are more involved with jobs than before,from my point of view,
job
satisfaction can cause a
pepoles
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peoples
people
better function and impact on
world
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.while
job
security has
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its
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it s
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its
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own importance too which could not be neglected.
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