Some people argue that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while others believe that they cannot always expect job satisfaction, and a permanent job is more important. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
in
reccent
decades,Correct your spelling
recent
people
are working harder than before and spend most of their time
on earning money
.some individuals believe that job
satisfaction is a significant element in each work.however
,some commentators argue that having a permanent job
is more important than job
satisfactoin
.there is a Correct your spelling
satisfaction
rang
of reasons on both sides which I will explain here.
on the one hand,Correct your spelling
range
people
spend most of their time
on their job
nowadays. contentment of job
plays a significant role in their lives.therefore
, they take their responsibility in better
way.Add an article
a better
for example
, if doctores
love what Correct your spelling
doctors
their
doing ,they can take care Replace the word
they're
they are
Change preposition
of patient
patient
in Fix the agreement mistake
patients
good
way.Change the article
a good
in addition
,people
s real potential and creativity are found by job
satisfaction.in
most of the Change preposition
apply
time
,enterprnures
are arrival after they discover their potential and have been brought up by a new idea.all of the successful Correct your spelling
enterprises
people
such
as ilan musk ,Edison,mike zakerberg
,love what Correct your spelling
Zuckerberg
their
doing so they make Replace the word
they're
they are
a
Change the article
an
anormous
change in the world .Correct your spelling
enormous
Artituctures
can be Correct your spelling
Architectures
anothert
example.Correct your spelling
another
thay
can manifest their souls and build Correct your spelling
they
a great mansions
which we can see in ancient Correct the article-noun agreement
a great mansion
great mansions
dynastier
like china and japan.
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dynasties
on the other hand
,firstly
,money
become a controversial topice
among communities nowadays.they are worried about their expenditures and try to Correct your spelling
topic
preper
a comfortable life for their family.Correct your spelling
prepare
for example
,in some countries such
as Iran or China , men are a breadwinner in societies so, job
security is become
more important than Change to the active voice
becomes
has become
job
contentment.even they force to get two or three job
at the same Change to a plural noun
jobs
time
for earning money
.in addition
old people
believe that any strange circumpstanses
might be Correct your spelling
circumstances
occured
suddenly,Correct your spelling
occurred
such
as variouse
types of disease or car accident which can Correct your spelling
various
parelize
Correct your spelling
paralyze
people
.therefore
, they can earn money
in that way easily.
to
Change preposition
In
conclusion
,communities are more involved with jobs than before,from my point of view,Add an article
a conclusion
the conclusion
job
satisfaction can cause a pepoles
better function and impact on Correct your spelling
peoples
people
world
.while Add an article
the world
job
security has Correct your spelling
its
it s
own importance too which could not be neglected.Correct your spelling
its
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