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car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam.' how true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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Due to advanced technology, there is a significant increase in the number of
vehicles
.It is argued that because of
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 increase in car ownership, cities are facing more traffic.As per my own perspective,
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 statement is true and I will discuss what
government
 can do to promote public transport rather than private
vehicles
.
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,more
vehicles
 on roads are not
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 concern of traffic blockage but
also
 affects
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, air pollution has resulted in climate change and global warming due to
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 of harmful gases
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 the air. It not only destroys the environment but
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big threat to health and results in
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such
 as Asthma or cardiovascular .
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,
Government
 needs to improve
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 transport system and provide easy access to nearby places in order to motivate people to use trains and buses.Other than that,
Government
 needs to raise awareness and educate people that what are the side effects of using more private
vehicles
. To Conclude,
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jam
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but
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if
government
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the government
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 takes possible measures and educates
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 people about the damages of air pollution,
this
 issue can be resolved.
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