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As global trade increase, many goods including those we use in daily basis are produced in another country and have to be transport long distance. Do benefit of this trend outweigh disadvantages?

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Nowadays,
as a result
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 of climbing relationships between countries, from an economic standpoint, there are countless
products
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 that are imported from overseas. These
goods
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 that are utilized by people daily have to
transport
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 long distances.
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 there are some negatives associated with that, I believe the main advantages are more substantial. On the one hand, a potential disadvantage of importing from other countries could be
unbalanced
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 supply and demand that
have
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 some adverse effects on domestic producers.
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, two years ago, owing to the lack of sufficient amount of water, the price of agricultural commodities was raised suddenly.
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, people trended towards foreign
goods
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 and our producers went bankrupt. Another perceived downside is that long-distance
make
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companies
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 use some additives in their
products
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.
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, research findings confirm that the chemical compositions have adverse effects on people’s health
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, a primary advantage of utilizing commodities that are produced in other nations is that individuals have access to widespread use of
goods
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 in different levels of quality.
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, electrical gadgets that play a vital role in our daily lives are not produced in numerous countries. A
further
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 benefit is
a
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fair competition that causes our
companies
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 to try to boost the quality of their
products
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. Balancing supply and demand make producers provide their consumers with lower price.
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, if our
companies
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 are able to compete at the highest standard
of
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in
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the world, we will benefit from more
export
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exports
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.
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, it is true that utilizing other countries’
goods
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seem
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seems
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 disadvantageous under certain circumstances.
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, I believe its positive effects in terms of a fair contest between
companies
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 and accessibility to widespread
products
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 override disadvantages.
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