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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

#price #petrol #traffic #pollution #measures
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Some
people
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 believe that to overcome
problem
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the problem
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 of
traffic
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 and
pollution
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, the best solution is to increase the
price
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 of fossil fuel. I agree with
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 notion as money is the biggest factor for anyone to consider for
tranportation
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transportation
 along with that there are many other measures to overcome that which I will discuss in
this
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further
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 essay.
To begin
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 with, the
price
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 of petrol
directly
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 related to using
the
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apply
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private vehicles.
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, if the
price
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 increase
then
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 usage of the personal vehicle reduce
automaticaly
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automatically
 as they both are
inversally
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universally
inversely
proposanal
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proposal
 to
eachother
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each other
. To exemplify, many
middle class
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people
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use
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 their own car or bike to their work because they can easily manage the cost, but if the
price
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 increase
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people
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 must go for
the
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public transportation.
However
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, there are many other factors which are
also
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 be effective to reduce
traffic
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conguction
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congestion
conduction
 and air
pollution
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, like improving the public
tranportation
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transportation
 facility. If the
government
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 provide the best services of general bushes in every
town
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then
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 many
people
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use
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 that facility for their day to day transportation and it will gradually
decrese
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decrease
 the issue of
traffic
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.
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,
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government
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the government
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 can
also
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intruduce
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introduce
 public vehicles which
use
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 electricity or CNG gas
instead
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 of fossil fuel which will be beneficial for reducing air
pollution
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. To cite an example, The
gujrat
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government
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 introduce BRTS buses in Ahmedabad
town
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 which has
separate
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a separate
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 path and
use
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 CNG gas,
therefore
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 it
have
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showed
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major
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a major
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 effect on reducing
traffic
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 and
pollution
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 in the
town
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. In conclusion, it is evident that
traffic
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 and
pollution
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 are the
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biggest
bigest
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 challenges for any
town
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 nowadays and increasing the
price
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 of fuel will directly beneficial to overcome that but there are
also
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 other options available on which
government
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 ought to work along with previous one.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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