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Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays the
climate
change
 problem has become a big question for every country in the world. There are some
people
 who stand that the developed
countries
 have more
responsibilities
 to
this
 issue while others stand that
this
 is the same
responsibilities
 to all
countries
 in the world.
This
 essay discusses both views and stands that there are the same
responsibilities
 in all
countries
 to protect our earth and environment. The
first
 reason that
people
 usually think that developed
countries
 have more responsibility for
climate
 problems is that those comytires used to have more factories and were more likely to produce some poisonous things for the earth.
For example
, China is the highest populated country in the world. Due to the high population, there are more traffic on the road and more factory in the city. The traffic and the factory will produce lots of CO2 which is the main factor causing
climate
change
.
In addition
, compared to others
countries
 developed counties seem to have more connection and combat to
climate
change
 factors.
On the other hand
, those
people
 who think that
everyone
 has responsibility for the environmental problem is that
this
 is the most fairly way for
everyone
. There will be no fight and debate in any country because
everyone
 is in the same situation.
Everyone
 has to face
this
 environmental question and if
everyone
 just does a small
change
 in their daily life it will take more effection on the
climate
 or on the environment.  In conclusion, there are many
people
 who think that developed
countries
 have more
responsibilities
 to
climate
change
 and environmental questions whereas ,in my opinion, all
countries
 should have the same
responsibilities
 towards protecting the environment.
Furthermore
, in
this
way
Add a comma
,way
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 there will bring more benefits to the earth and will be more work to solve the
climate
change
 problem.
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