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Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays the
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 problem has become a big question for every country in the world. There are some
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 who stand that the developed
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 have more
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 issue while others stand that
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 is the same
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 to all
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 in the world.
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 essay discusses both views and stands that there are the same
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 in all
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 to protect our earth and environment. The
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 reason that
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 usually think that developed
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 have more responsibility for
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 problems is that those comytires used to have more factories and were more likely to produce some poisonous things for the earth.
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, China is the highest populated country in the world. Due to the high population, there are more traffic on the road and more factory in the city. The traffic and the factory will produce lots of CO2 which is the main factor causing
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, compared to others
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 developed counties seem to have more connection and combat to
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 factors.
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, those
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 who think that
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 has responsibility for the environmental problem is that
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 is the most fairly way for
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. There will be no fight and debate in any country because
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 is in the same situation.
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 has to face
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 environmental question and if
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 just does a small
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 in their daily life it will take more effection on the
climate
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 or on the environment.  In conclusion, there are many
people
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 who think that developed
countries
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 have more
responsibilities
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 to
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change
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 and environmental questions whereas ,in my opinion, all
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 should have the same
responsibilities
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 towards protecting the environment.
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, in
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 there will bring more benefits to the earth and will be more work to solve the
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 problem.
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