many parents complain about violence promoted to their children through video games, tv programs and other media. Why is it happening? What can be the solution for it?

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many parents complain about violence promoted to their children through video games, tv programs and other media. Why is it happening? What can be the solution for it?

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

A 14-year-old young who seriously damaged school was made to clean streets as a punishment. Do you think young criminals should be sent to prison or there are alternative forms of punishment? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people hold the view that a good teacher is more important for education success while others think the student’s attitude is more important to succeed in education. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.