Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interest, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

It is an often argued issue whether employers should ask
applicants
' personal
infomation
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information
or
this
is an
irrelavant
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irrelevant
. Some think that
this
detail might be necessary and useful while others say that
this
is an
irrelavant
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irrelevant
data
which is
applicants
' details.
However
,
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essay discusses both viewpoints, I strongly agree with the former opinion for the following reasons. On the one hand,
applicants
' information is an
irrelavant
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irrelevant
for
applyinng
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applying
job
and there are numerous employers
ask
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often
similarly
. A persons'
curriculam
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curriculum
skills, experience and other extra technical abilities
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the
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main importance and require
otherwise
personal
data
is unwanted for managers.
For example
, if a person
applys
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applies
apply
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for in
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in
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HR
job
, it needs
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the
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MBA qualification, management skill as well as any previous experience;
otherwise
is he single or married and hobbies is indeed unwanted.
On the other hand
, managers should be known
about
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applicants
' personal
inforamation
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information
because
this
can lead to understanding interviewers'
background
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;
as a result
, managers can analyse interviewers
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any criminal background and had any case in order to they can appoint
a
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honest man rather than criminal.
For example
, if a man
applys
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applies
a
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bank
job
, employers should be known about his personal
data
because
this
job
is money handle employment.
In addition
, appointing a woman
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candidate
in any work
,
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is she single or married is the most
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because she might be gone anywhere after marriage. To conclude,
canditate
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candidate
personal
informations
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information
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is
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unwanted in some
situation
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situations
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; money handling and
higher
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level of position in employment should be known about the
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candidate's
personal
data
. In my opinion, about
this
,
applicants
' personal details might be
relavant
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relevant
and very useful.
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