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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
These days virtual shopping
are
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 in high demand due to its numerous advantages.
Although
, some
people
 believe that the increase in electronic shopping will
results
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 in
shutting
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the shutting
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 down of all stores in towns and cities.
However
, from my personal
perspective
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 I do not agree with the given statement. The following essay will discuss the points in favour of my opinion.
To begin
 with, online shopping
place
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plays
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 a significant role in
daily
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the daily
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 life of every
individuals
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individual
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.
Also
, most
of
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the
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people
 believe that
,
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 in
this
 hectic life schedule web shopping came as a helping hand for them because
,
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 it is helping them to
purches
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purchase
 their required products at the
door steps
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doorsteps
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.
Moreover
, it provides multiple options, brands for
single
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 product.
Thus
, everything is available at one click and within less time.
For instance
, even
most
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 precious things like gold and diamond
jewelry
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jewellery
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also
 getting
deliver
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 safely and with no change in quality.
Hence
, online shopping is like
a
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magic
which
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that
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 delivers
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a product
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product
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products
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on
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in
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 one click
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within
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with in
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within
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 a short span of time.
On the other hand
, though,
tele
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the
-ordering has gained immense popularity.
Nevertheless
, there are some
people
 who
believes
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 in traditional shopping rather than e-Commerce shopping.
Further
, I think there are so many reasons due to which
peoples
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people
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 are still inclined towards their old style of purchasing. Mainly, some
people
 believe that if they go for online
purchase
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purchases
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 they will
endup
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end up
 buying
non essential
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 things. To illustrate, on
website
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the website
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their
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there
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 are hundreds of products
which
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that
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 captivate
attention
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the attention
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 of a person.
Also
 in some cases due to offers
people
 get attracted towards online shopping and ended up buying.
Thus
, it the main reason
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supermarkets
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super markets
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supermarkets
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 are still alive and some
people
are really believe
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 in offline shopping. To
recaptulate
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recapitulate
, I would like to say that though online shopping is growing faster but, I do not think it will completely replace traditional shopping.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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