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In school or universities, girls prefer subjects related to art and boys prefer subjects realted to science. Should this thendency be changed? what your opionion?.

#school #universities #girls #subjects #art #boys #science #thendency #opionion
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It is believed by some people that females supposed to
study
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 the art subjects in schools and universities and leave the science subjects for males. I take the view
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 belief should replace by another belief
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 as both genders are free to choose whatever subject they want to
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. In the past, girls were told to not
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 at all, and that there is no point in their
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study
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 because they will get
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married
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marred
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 eventually. After
few
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 decades, girls were allowed to complete their
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study
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 but in certain fields
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 as
the
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art. The main reason behind
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 that girls will be able
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marriage
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 while they are studying the art since it
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doesn't
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 take as much effort as studying
scienc
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science
 subjects
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 means that they can balance between the marredge's
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responsibilities
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