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Most employers nowadays put increasing emphasis on social skills. Some people believe that social skills are important in addition to good qualification for job success. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years many employers have boosted the significance
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 social grace to the
people
.A few
people
 believe that social
skills
 are dominant in adding to better qualifications for job victory.I believe that, these social
skills
 are helpful to create a friendly environment and who have frequently
communicate
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 with the
people
 in the marketing industry
as a result
 in achieving better profit.
Firstly
,as social expertise
people
 can often create friendly surroundings in their working place.They can easily adapt to the
people
, and they can handle problems in an uncomplicated method.
However
, good communication helps to survive humans in any type of censorious environment.Because they can create a surrounding as trouble-free.
Additionally
, they can forward to initiate any kind of issues with
solution
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 to the industry for the co-workers.
On the other hand
, better communicating
people
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 who have survived in the marketing field, they can easily
reaches
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to
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the customer to
fulfill
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 their accomplishment.
Wheras
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Whereas
, it helps to generate better revenue to the
industy
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industry
.
For instance
, who is having good communication
skills
 in telemarketing, if the customer
ask
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 any
quires
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 related to the product, they can comfortably
explained
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about
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the product and satisfy their customer requirements
.
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 Because of that, they can doubtlessly
selling
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 their product,
it
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 has helped to impulsively increase the profit for the company.
However
, I believe that
people
 have more social
skills
 to make the surrounding in a smooth way.
Additionally
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 it helps to prove a better profit to the industry and
also
such
skills
 are key to get success at work.
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