Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Acceptance of difficult situations
such
as financial hardships
and emotional distresses is considered by some people
the best way of coping, whereas others claim that it is more beneficial for people
to attempt to improve the issues they are facing. Personally, I agree with the latter perspective. Both sides of the argument and the reasoning for my opinion will be discussed in the essay.
Accepting that one
's cannot change
their surroundings in cases of hardships
is believed to be a realistic approach to life
by some people
. As society
is a machine, with millions of gears turning coherently, any individual facing difficulties is said to disrupt the whole process; therefore
, they should try to change
their life
. However
, it should not be forgotten that within millions of small gears, losing a few would not affect the overall efficiency of society
. For
example
, an individual facing poverty in exchange for more wealth to
other citizens is beneficial to the population. In America, the majority of wealth is in the hand of only the top 5% of the population. Change preposition
for
This
has rendered any attempts to improve personal circumstances obsolete and meaningless. Moreover
, when facing challenges and hardships
in life
, people
can only rely on a rare success in career or personal matters. For
example
, selling items online is one
of the most effective way
to eradicate Change to a plural noun
ways
monetary
problem, but it is Add an article
the monetary
also
the most volatile business that commonly result
in more Change the verb form
results
lose
than gain. Another Replace the word
loss
example
is a failing relationship, where further
attempts to improve could be seen as a mean
to protect personal pride rather than actual attempts.
Even though Fix the agreement mistake
means
society
, on the whole, do not care about a small number of people
with issues, they themselves can do various things to improve their circumstances. I believe that every individual possesses the ability to solve bad situations, to
adapt and overcome Fix the infinitive
apply
hardships
, and to
improve oneself to a higher level. Fix the infinitive
apply
Firstly
, necessity is the mother of invention. Any issues in life
can be seen as an opportunity for personal development, and any problems in life
can be a way to measure personal worth in society
. For
example
, a small budget for groceries and daily items can aid in creating a reasonable, logical spending habit. Moreover
, becoming better at a hobby or a profession can lead to a tremendous boost in self-confidence and living standards. Knowing that one
possess
an achievement can create a sense of self-confidence and personal trust. And Change the verb form
possesses
such
attitude
will benefit Correct article usage
an attitude
one
's life
as their perspectives and actions will change
accordingly
.
In conclusion, while it is true that society
will not change
itself to improve the hardships
of a person, he himself owns the strength to make changes and to improve himself for the purpose of changing his life
. I strongly believe that regardless of difficulties or challenges in life
, there are always opportunities for self-improvement.Submitted by tonykim09 on
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Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.