The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart shows percentages of three different nutrients in typical meals.
As the charts show sodium and saturated fat intake takes place during dinner, in the highest proportion. Meanwhile, from sodium, people in the USA eat
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less from snacks, which is only 14%, and take in only 16% Correct article usage
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saturated fat during breakfast. Change preposition
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, they consume almost the same amount of both at lunch, which proportion is between 26 to 29%.
The society of the USA eats up the most from added sugar from snacks and the least from meals of
lunch.
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, from all the nutrients mentioned above, american
people eat the least amount from all at breakfast, which Change the capitalization
American
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16
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To sum up
the comparison, in the USA, humans eat from sodium the maximum during breakfast and snacking, and the maximum at dinner. The same statement is true for saturated fat as well. Meanwhile, the american
community eats the most of added sugar through snacks.Change the capitalization
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