IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4

The pie charts below show units of eletricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show units of eletricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
On
Change preposition
In
show examples
 the pie
charts
Add a comma
,charts
show examples
 we can see different
units
Use synonyms
 of electricity by fuel source in
Australia
Use synonyms
 and
France
Use synonyms
 in 1980 and 2000. There are four different charts sorted by country and
year
Use synonyms
. In the
year
Use synonyms
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
1980, the total production was 100
units
Use synonyms
 in
Australia
Use synonyms
,
meanwhile
Add a comma
,meanwhile
show examples
 it was only 90
units
Use synonyms
 in
France
Use synonyms
.
To
Change preposition
In
show examples
 the
year
Use synonyms
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
2000, these
units
Use synonyms
 changed and increased to 170 in
Australia
Use synonyms
, and 180
units
Use synonyms
 in
France
Use synonyms
. On one hand, in 1980, in
Australia
Use synonyms
,
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
half of the total
units
Use synonyms
was
Change the verb form
were
show examples
 Coal, meanwhile in
France
Use synonyms
 Coal was only 25
units
Use synonyms
 in the same
year
Use synonyms
.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, electricity production by fuel source changed a lot by the
year
Use synonyms
 2000, because
units
Use synonyms
 of Coal went up sharply, to 130
units
Use synonyms
 in
Australia
Use synonyms
.
Nevertheless
Linking Words
, there was an upward trend in
France
Use synonyms
 too, but in Nuclear Power, which type of fuel source
Australia
Use synonyms
 had never used.
However
Linking Words
, it was 126
units
Use synonyms
 in
France
Use synonyms
 in 2000.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
▼
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words units, australia, france, year with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: