Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

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sharing
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will explain my views with reasons in following
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by posting
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video
of eating candy and other sweet items .
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for all
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unemployed
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entertainment
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boost
knowledge of
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social
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truth that everything has two aspects so
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of
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negative
impacts . As
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users
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whether personal or
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provencal
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their
accounts which can
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disadvantages
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personal
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