Graduates who cannot find work in their chosen field should be advised to do a second degree, rather than taking a job that does not interest them. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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issues, when they embark to seek a job, which is coherent with their core qualification. Ultimately, some percentage of graduates give up
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by companies that are not preferred by them. Some people deem that
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them an additional income. Even so, it would be unfair not to mention the fact that the basic reason of working
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, they often feel unnecessary and some of
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some
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appear in these
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I would stress, as I have mentioned that government should concentrate on
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. In my opinion, the person should not spend his young life to find himself.
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must decide upon for themselves what occupation they prefer more.
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