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Men and women are different in terms of their characteristics and abilities.For this reason some jobs are better done by men and others by women.

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Introduction
In ancient times,
the
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women
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was
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 known as weak figures in
comminuty
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community
.Both male and female
are indulge
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are indulged
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 in
variety
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a variety
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 of qualities and abilities.some works can't be conducted by
women
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,due to
this
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 issue that
community
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 suggest ladies should be behind
of
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the gents.I will argue that
public
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 should be dominant
for
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in
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 their
behavior
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behaviour
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.
Body paragraph 1
Firstly
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,it is
disbutable
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disputable
indisputable
 fact ,whether a job or a profession is decided upon the qualifications and the personality of the candidate,not under the circumstances of empathy and traditional myths.
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,though,
women
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 are
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strong
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 desired category when it comes to hope and the target.There is no replacement for
a
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 pain that mom holds throughout the maternal process.She overcomes every drastic situation throughout the 9 months period.That would be the proper example for the current issue.
Eventhough
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Even though
 men
reputed
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 to be gigantic and strongest
person
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people
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,yet the gift of bearing
child
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a child
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 has
given
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been given
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 to
women
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 by the almighty.
Body paragraph 2
Secondly
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 and more importantly,
location
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the location
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 where girls present is a place
where
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 known to be a heaven.If it
a
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workplace with heavy works or a department of any authority ladies
willing
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 to fill the whole path from enlightenment.So there will always be a balance if there are both genders involved in any situation or target.since
childhood
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 we have believed that there will always be
a
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women
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women
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beside
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 a successful man,from our personal achievements can see that it is indeed a truth.In spite of
that
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 there were great leaders who are
women
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 in many countries,who got succeeded with their aims and targets of huge achievements for the
benefits
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 of countries.
Conclusion
By way of conclusion,society as a whole,we should consider both
geneders
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genders
 with
same
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 prospect.even for professional or personal criteria.
Then
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 there will be a huge achievement for the society's growth.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innate
  • biological differences
  • characteristics
  • gender roles
  • stereotypes
  • equal opportunities
  • gender biases
  • fair representation
  • skills
  • qualifications
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