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Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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The way we deal with our
problems
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 as an adult depends on what kind of family we are brought up in. And how
families
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 deals with
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problem
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the problem
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 clearly depend on how wealthy the family is.
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, I agree that
children
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 that grew in a poor family are usually better prepared when dealing with
problems
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 in their lives.
Children
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 from poor
families
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 are often limited in the choices they have when they are trying to solve a
problem
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. While
children
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 from rich
families
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 usually have more options, because they have more resources at their disposal.
Children
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 from poor households are usually more accustomed to situations where they have to solve
problems
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 without or with very little
money
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.
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, they are usually better at managing their finances and often much more creative when solving a
problem
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. A simple example could be, when buying clothes for their
children
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 these parents will buy clothes that are slightly bigger than the child, with the assumption as they grew they do not need to buy more clothes.
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,
money
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 is saved. And I think that kind of mindset really helped when they are faced with a
problem
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.
Children
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 from a rich household
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, since they have more resources, oftentimes are used to spending
money
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 to solve their
problems
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. And every time they are faced with a slight inconvenience, if they can use
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money
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 to remove the inconvenience, they will use it. With these kinds of behaviour, these people are terrible at managing their finances. Which usually means, they will end up with more
problems
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 later in life. To conclude,
children
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 brought up in poor
families
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 are accustomed to solving hard
problems
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, because they cannot solve their
problems
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 as easily as rich
children
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 when they are solving their
problems
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 with
money
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.
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, I agree that
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 from poor
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 will be better prepared to deal with
problems
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 as an adult.
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