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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction .do agree or disagree?

#salary #job #satisfaction
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In a modern world, money is always a concern since it can provide a better life quality.
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, sometimes a good salary comes together with an unhappy position. In
this
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 essay, I will explain why I believe job satisfaction is more important than a good salary. Considering how much time of our day we spend at work, it is crucial to put that effort into something that we are really passionate about.
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, the day has 24 hours, one-
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 we spent sleeping and another
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 we spend working. So almost 30% of life is intended for the job.
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, if one's is not happy and pleased with their professional activity, it is considered to have an unhappy and unpleasant life, even if it is financially worthy. In my view, I believe that benefits which come from doing some work that one's is really passionate about outweigh the earnings of the worst career.
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, I think that when we do something that really enjoys doing , it is possible to make a living out of it, and at some point will be a reward for that.
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,
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 should provide a sense of purpose and
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 fulfilment. In conclusion, taking into account the amount of time of our day we are working, I consider
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 more important to spend these hours doing something that gives you pleasure, than something that gives you a lot of money, but no happiness.
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, a better scenario will be making a living out of a job that you love.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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