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some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology

#people #university #students #study #subjects #future #science #technology
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Considering both two ideas which are the general thoughts of
society
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, I agree with the
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 idea which is
university
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students
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 should have
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 to study whatever they like.
University
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students
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 are
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 of
group
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the group
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 in the
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 having much vison or the idea about
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their future and current
on goings
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ongoings
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 in the
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. Before they
entered
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to
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the
university
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 as
students
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, they may pass out various
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 of examinations
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 as A/L, O/L and grade 5
examination
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.
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, before doing the A/L all of the
students
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 should select the stream which is according
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to
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 their future career. In that stage most of the parents, teachers may support
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them.
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 decision is very important. Because
this
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 would be the fundamentals or the
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 for the
university
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 stream. So,
after
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students
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 who
is
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 eligible to
entered
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to
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the
university
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 should have
authority
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the authority
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 to follow up
the
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any subjects which are related to their degree.
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 only
students
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 spent their
university
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 life happily and
freedom
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. I think that
this
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 will not be
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society
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 and
this
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 may lead the
students
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 to
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innovations too. If not, they may suffer their
university
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 life and
mislead
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 to not
he
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covers
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 up the degree within
given
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 period. So that will be the bad or the negative effect to the
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. For
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one
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 I remembered
one
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 of my
university
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friend
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, she is Maheshi,
came
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who came
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 from
small
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 village with
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 background family. But because of her encourage she entered
to
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the
university
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 luckily. Her future plan is to be a Researcher
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 farming. Unfortunately, according to the
university
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permissions
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 she was unable to do the fundamental subject which is related to that career. So Maheshi
stressed
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 and ailed to get high marks for other subjects too. That was
worstly
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worst
 effect
to
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 her life and after 3 years only she success with her degree.
Currently
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 she working as a teacher at
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 of the small
school
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 in her small village. Because of
university
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restriction
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, we are missing
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valuable resource
to
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the
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society
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 and
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nature. In conclusion, If people
doing
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 the thing they wish, it may lead
innovations
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to innovations
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 and new concepts. Because they interest the thing which people
are wish
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 to do. It may affect the new innovations and new concepts.
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