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Nowadays, many people change jobs quite regularly, rather than working in the company for their entire careers. Why do you think this is happening? How can companies keep their workers?

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These days, human resources are
one
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 of the important assets in
organizations
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.
Besides
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, loyalty in
work
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 is another issue for each
company
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.
Consequently
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,
people
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 argue that
employees
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 tend to change their occupations frequently, and the number of
people
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 who want to
work
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 in
one
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company
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 has decreased. Now I want to explain why
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 drawback exists and what solution can be offered.
To begin
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 with,
perks
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 play a vital role in preserving a
company
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's
staff
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. Some
organizations
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 have a steady line, they do not have any
perks
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 and rewards in their instructions.
As a result
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, when
staff
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 gain enough experience, they leave
companies
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 and make an effort to find a better
job
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 in another organization.
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, another point that needs to be considered is
job
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 promotions. Several
employees
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 who
work
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 in a
company
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 for the long
term
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without
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with out
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without
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 any changes
,
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apply
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 face a
problemin
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problem in
 their careers.
This
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 is mainly because they cannot get enough
job
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 satisfaction. Thereby, they leave those
organizations
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.
For example
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, state-owned
companies
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 do not pay attention to their
staffs
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staff
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 and sometimes we can see that an employee works in a position for the long
term
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. These days, human resources are
one
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 of the important assets in
organizations
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.
Besides
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, loyalty in
work
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 is another issue for each
company
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.
Consequently
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,
people
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 argue that
employees
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 tend to change their occupations frequently, and the number of
people
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 who want to
work
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 in
one
Use synonyms
company
Use synonyms
 has decreased. Now I want to explain why
this
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 drawback exists and what solution can be offered.
To begin
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 with,
perks
Use synonyms
 play a vital role in preserving a
company
Use synonyms
's
staff
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. Some
organizations
Use synonyms
 have a steady line, they do not have any
perks
Use synonyms
 and rewards in their instructions.
As a result
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, when
staff
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 gain enough experience, they leave
companies
Use synonyms
 and make an effort to find a better
job
Use synonyms
 in another organization.
Secondly
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, another point that needs to be considered is
job
Use synonyms
 promotions. Several
employees
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 who
work
Use synonyms
 in a
company
Use synonyms
 for the long
term
Use synonyms
Correct your spelling
without
show examples
with out
Correct your spelling
without
show examples
 any changes
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 face a
problemin
Correct your spelling
problem in
 their careers.
This
Linking Words
 is mainly because they cannot get enough
job
Use synonyms
 satisfaction. Thereby, they leave those
organizations
Use synonyms
.
For example
Linking Words
, state-owned
companies
Use synonyms
 do not pay attention to their
staffs
Fix the agreement mistake
staff
show examples
 and sometimes we can see that an employee works in a position for the long
term
Use synonyms
.
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