the diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and future.

the diagrams below show the water supply system in Australia present and future.
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The diagrams illustrate the
process
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of
water
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supply in Australia at present and future.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the
process
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in the future does not link with the river. It is
also
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a relative
process
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with the 3 stages. Nowadays, the
process
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of the
water
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supply system is starting at a dam or storage, where
water
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is divided into two parts by a machine, these two
water
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are called wastewater and pure
water
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. In the following stage, pure
water
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is supplied to any households, factories, shops and city for use in various activities,
while
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the other
water
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is sent to the
water
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treatment plant. After the pure
water
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which is used by households and different places will send the wastewater back to the
water
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treatment plant,
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, the system will send the stormwater to the river. In the future day, waste and stormwater which are delivered from households and various places will treat in the
water
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treatment plant by a machine. ,
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consequently
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the machine
causing
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causes
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the dirty
water
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change
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to change
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to
the
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apply
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pure
water
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,
that
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which
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people can use apply again.
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