In some Vinhomes areas, fast food, prepared meals, and sugary drinks are now sold in more shops and at lower prices than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

There are many
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in terms of foods in
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community
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communities
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like Vinhomes. The bustle and hustle of life
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resulted in the widespread
availibility
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availability
of junk
food
,
processes
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processed
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meals,
sugarydrinks
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sugary drinks
...all at cheaper prices than they
werepreviously
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were previously
.
This
paper will examine if
this
development has beneficial or negative consequences. On the one hand, fast
food
, ready-to-eat meal, and sugary drinks bring with them a slew of benefits.
To begin
with, most individuals are today overburdened with work or school commitments and are unable to manage their time to make
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food
for themselves. For them,
this
type of
food
and drink is
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a times-saving
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option that
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them to focus on their work.
Second
,
loer
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lower
-cost goods and beverages enable not just impoverished individuals to purchase, but
also
businesses to enhance sales.
As a result
, the more fast
food
, prepared
meal
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meals
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and sugary drinks sold, the better the
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will be. All of these meals and beverages,
on the other hand
, are considered harmful and can affect people's health.
To begin
with
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them
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can deplete residents' immune systems. The
reson
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reason
behind
this
is that they are devoid of nutrients
such
as vitamins.
Second
, bad eating may be
theo
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the
cause of
someailments
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some ailments
. They are heavy fat and salt, which can contribute to weight gain, chronic diseases.
Furthermore
, the
presevatives
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preservatives
and chemicals in these foods have the potential to cause cancer or major illness. To
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, while
theo
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the
popularity of
fastfood
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fast food
, processed meals, and sugary drinks
is
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beneficial to busy or impoverished people and the
economiy
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economy
, users of these foods and beverages may have to compromise their health.
This
type of development, in my opinion, is great in the
shoort
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short
term, but it is a bad improvement in the long run.
Submitted by nhudinhngocanh on

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