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In some Vinhomes areas, fast food, prepared meals, and sugary drinks are now sold in more shops and at lower prices than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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I think in some Vinhomes areas, fast
food
, prepared meals, and
surgary
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sugary
surgery
drinks
 are now sold in more shops and at lower
prices
 than in the past is a positive
development
.
The
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first
, like a
developped
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developed
 country, there are a
lot
 of famous fast
food
 companies in Vinhomes areas make the
prices
is
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are
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 more
competition
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competitive
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 than
the
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in the
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 past, and give a
lot
 of
chance
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chances
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 for the consumers and they can
chose
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choose
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 the best one with the lower
prices
. Compare
in
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to
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 the past, these
food
 were expensive and not
variety
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varied
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.
The
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Secondly
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secondly
, It is very popular to use
the
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apply
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fast
food
 and prepared
meal
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meals
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 in
aldult's
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adult's
adults
 trend nowadays. They spend
alot
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a lot
 of time
for
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apply
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studying, working so there is not enough
the
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apply
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time
for
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to
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cook
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a cook
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 a meal
their
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on their
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 own. So they can
chose
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choose
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the
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a
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 suitable meal with
the
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apply
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special
prices
 and save a
lot
 of time to their task and make our society more
development
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developed
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. The variety of fast
food
 are suitable for the breakfast and quick meal , A prepared meals are adaptable for the lunch and the
surgary
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sugary
surgery
drinks
 are
the
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a
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 big fan for young people, so these products make
ours
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our
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 life more comfortable.
Furthermore
, It's
delicous
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delicious
 to combine fast
food
 with the
surgary
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sugary
surgery
drinks
,
this
 compose give us a
lot
 of energy and make us quickly
recovery
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recover
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 after
do
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doing
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 exercise or working which is very
pupular
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popular
 in modern society. In conclusion, the
development
more
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of more
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 shops with fast
food
 and prepared meals and
surgary
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sugary
surgery
drinks
 with the lower
prices
 in the Vinhomes areas is suitable for the young and dynamic generation,
this
 is positive
development
comme
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come
 another famous region in the world.
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