Recently published figures show that the wildlife population around the world has decreased by around fifty per cent over the last fifty years. What can we do to help protect the wildlife around the world?

The
last
news about wildlife shouts quite loud that population cut in half in past fifty years. Sadly,
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trend easy observable in all areas and climate zones. For sure powerful human civilization could apply some force to reduce, stop and potentially restore
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part of caused harm. Let’s think about what could be done in the
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place to help protect our planet neighbours.
First
and foremost, it’s required to preserve life areas and conditions of essential needs of rare breeds and species in danger.
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also
includes applying high environment
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standards and ecology technologies.
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, water sources are highly important for wildlife
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surviving so fabrics and manufactories should use isolated water cycles to prevent waste. With
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availability of clean water as a base for new green areas and
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it will be possible to settle woods with animals and birds as it was before. And again,
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of the human is quite often aimed
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of animals with some pretending that it’s required for
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. But, in most cases, that’s not exactly true because people could eat
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a lot of different greens, vegetables and nuts, replacing meat, fish and eggs. And for sure purchasing new shoes from alligator skin isn’t about
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should save and protect
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smaller brothers with ideas of true kindness and humanity in everyone’s head. According to eastern philosophy, all these little and big creatures have little and big souls inside so
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soul could give a hand to reduce pain and save lives. Being the most powerful creatures on
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how
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and what it causes.
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all children of Mother Nature to teach our kids about true love.
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