Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to get a satisfying career than those who frequently change jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Nowadays,many individuals feel that doing
one
job
constantly makes them boring as well as irritating them.humans have diverse mindsets which
varies
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from person to person.some
people
work under organisations for long years while others alter their
jobs
often.
people
gain ample benefits by doing
same
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work constantly.I strongly accord with the statement.
this
essay will discuss why
this
is beneficial. To embark on,staying at
one
company means
interest
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the interest
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on only
one
skill.these days,
people
are in the depression due to changes their
jobs
for simple reasons like getting a low income and lack of transport facilities while they are going to
office
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the office
an office
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.choosing only
one
job
brings mind-relaxation
,
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because they do not need to search
another
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job
.
for instance
,according to
one
study,
people
who are resigning their
jobs
early
they
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have a mental tension in search of acquiring a good
job
. On another hand,
people
may have got a chance to earn
high
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salary and experience.prominent companies like google and Wipro offer a decent salary after some time
,
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if we
working
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work
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continuously for that particular company.for
an
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apply
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example,if a person
staying
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at
one
organisation for many years,after ten years he got a promotion like CEO position,
then
he will
success
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succeed
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in his position without
troubles
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.especially,
people
who have government
jobs
,those persons do not resign their
job
.because after their retirement there is a chance to get
pension
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a pension
the pension
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. To conclude,nowadays,every
job
is dominant ,because competition is increasing by leaps and bounds if we lose
job
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a job
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then
it is very difficult to obtain another
job
.
therefore
,
people
should not leave their
jobs
.
job
is an indispensable thing in everyone's life.
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