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Nowadays many job seekers are finding jobs that force them to move for from their family and friends. Is it a positive or a negative trend? What can be done about it?

#job #seekers #jobs #force #move #friends #trend
This
 is with reference to the advertisement about the unpaid Job with local
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children
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.
However
,let me tell you
this
 would be a pleasure for me to render my services and experience for a noble cause.
Further
, I would like to know in detail
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which sort of Voluntary work would be required.
Although
 I am very passionate about
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, Enjoy their company a lot.
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, when my expertise
required
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 for the development and training of Poor, needy young kids. Well,I would be grateful if you could give me the details of working hours ,Specifically days,AS, I have to manage schedule
accordingly
 of official hours.
Lastly
,Since I am already committed
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 hundred of students , In
this
 regard, I would like you to confirm the timings and days.
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 I will be available from 1st of
next
 month on 8.AM till 2 PM . Looking forward
for
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 your positive
responce
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 . Regards, Zunaira
faiz
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