Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in words, pictures, music or film) in whichever way they wish. There should be no government restrictions on what they do. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#artists #freedom #pictures #music #film #government #restrictions

Many

ideas

, which have been creative by

artists

, must have the freedom for presenting to a community in any way

such

as words, pictures, music or movie.

Moreover

, a

government

should

control

with an equal standard. In my opinion, I completely agree about

this

idea

however

the idea should be illustrated with reality without

a fake

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fake news

a piece of fake news

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news

. After the revolution of Thailand in 2015, they have not been changed in a

government

with

control

by the prime minister who has been the same in 7 years ago.

this

is not a normal situation in Thailand

thus

many

artists

, who disagree about

this

revolution, are protesting in different ways,

for instance

, some

artists

comment about the

government

on the social network after that they will have blocked by the

government

, some

artists

find the way to illustrate by pictures, music or film these making people access to the

news

, which

government

restrict it, easily.

Finally

, these

ideas

that I mentioned

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have been concealed by the

government

On the other hand

, some

artists

saw a benefit of globalization which can let people

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easy accessing by spreading fake

news

, so I agree to the

government

which they can

control

this

fake

news

however

they should be giving freedom to every artist who creating performance with the fact.

Lastly

, if the

government

has not

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equal standard, they will be cannot solve these problems in a long term. In conclusion, I agree with the concept about the

artists

who have the freedom to create their

ideas

but it must

a trust information

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. So the

government

can

control

the

ideas

in case of the

artists

make fake

news

in their performance.

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9Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

278 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Task Achievement: 5.5

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Relevant & specific examples

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Topic Vocabulary:

Freedom of expression
Censorship
Artistic integrity
Cultural identity
Social responsibility
Public order
Discrimination
Hate speech
Self-regulation
Government intervention
Vulnerable groups
Creativity
Democracy
Fundamental right
Moral obligation

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