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Some think that climate change reforms will negatively affect business. Others feel they are an opportunity for businesses. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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It is believed that weather changes will have a bad influence on the
business
 by some people. While the rest think that it is a good chance to make money. I think these reforms will affect negatively and both sides of the argument are discussed in the forthcoming paragraphs and my opinion as well. In our modern, world climate and
business
 are interconnected.
This
 makes the
business
 even more dependent on climate change on the planet. Due to the increase in the average temperature on the planet, agriculture is under threat. Because the increasing drought in some areas and soil salinization is "killing"
business
 in
this
 industry. On the other side of the coin,
as a result
 of global warming, more and more ozone holes appear in the atmosphere.
This
 in turn leads to more solar rays hitting our earth and
this
 can be used by solar panel manufacturers and energy businessmen. As an example, over the past 3 years since 2019, the volume of production of solar panels has grown by 18% and is expected to increase to 25% in the
next
 2 years, To sum it up I would like to add that there are always two sides to the coin, but climate change,
this
 is global warming, does more harm to
business
 and the economy than good.
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