With the development of social media, more and more youngsters are being allowed unsupervised access to the internet in order to meet and chat with friends which can lead to potentially dangerous situations. What solutions can you suggest to deal with this problem?

In the contemporary epoch, a high number of youngsters are making
use
of the
internet
in order to meet and talk with friends through social
media
. Many
problems
have occurred in terms of
children
such
as various
kind
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of health
problems
, connected with to express their emotional feelings and
also
led to
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of
the
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face-to-face interaction.
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problems
can be tackled by taking some measurements.
To begin
with, in over the world there are many
people
who are making
use
of
internet
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the internet
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in order to solve their
problems
related to their work or education. So
that is
the reason why everyone
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it until late hours which can
led
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lead
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to different
kind
of health
problems
such
spinal curvatures by sitting down a lot in front of the
computers
and vision
problems
by looking at the
computers
.
Secondly
, different
kind
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of
people
completely
prefer
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to meet others
in
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the
internet
through social
media
that
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led to
lack
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a lack
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of
the
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face-to-face interaction.
In other words
, thank
to
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this
problem they are really suffering from
to express
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expressing
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their emotional or other feelings in front
the
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computers
by talking
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to unfamiliar
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individuals. As a consequence,
this
is causing them to
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of interaction which is really important to express their feeling.
On the other hand
,
this
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main
problems
can be tackled by parents who
use
the
internet
a lot. They can
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on websites
which
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children
do not
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with it.
Furthermore
, parents can offer their
children
a surprise in return less making
use
of
internet
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the internet
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.
As a
result
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this
solution can be
more
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effective
ways
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way
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to avoid youngsters looking at
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the
computers
a lot. Another effective solution is for
social
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a social
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media
company
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companies
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to set up age limits for
children
.
For example
, Facebook recently updated its privacy policy that limits access to kids under the age of ten.
Also
Whatsapp a major social
media
app
,
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recently announced plans to unveil its messaging app for kids. Hopefully,
this
would help to reduce
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number of young
people
who are bullied online since only teenagers will
use
it. To conclude, young
people
use
the
internet
to interact with different
kind
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kinds
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of
people
online without any guidance and
this
makes them really free and give self-confident to write others unethical messages. In order
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to be out of it, parents should keep an eye
their
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communications and give necessary advice to their
children
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