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With the development of social media, more and more youngsters are being allowed unsupervised access to the internet in order to meet and chat with friends which can lead to potentially dangerous situations. What solutions can you suggest to deal with this problem?

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In the contemporary epoch, a high number of youngsters are making
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 of the
internet
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 in order to meet and talk with friends through social
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. Many
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 have occurred in terms of
children
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 of
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face-to-face interaction.
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problems
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 can be tackled by taking some measurements.
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people
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 who are making
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internet
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the internet
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 in order to solve their
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 the reason why everyone
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 it until late hours which can
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that
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face-to-face interaction.
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computers
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 individuals. As a consequence,
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 main
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 can be tackled by parents who
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 a lot. They can
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 on websites
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children
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 do not
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 with it.
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 effective
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 to avoid youngsters looking at
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the
computers
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media
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company
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 to set up age limits for
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.
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, Facebook recently updated its privacy policy that limits access to kids under the age of ten.
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 Whatsapp a major social
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 app
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 recently announced plans to unveil its messaging app for kids. Hopefully,
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 number of young
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 who are bullied online since only teenagers will
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use
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 to interact with different
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 of
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 online without any guidance and
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