With the development of social media, more and more youngsters are being allowed unsupervised access to the internet in order to meet and chat with friends which can lead to potentially dangerous situations. What solutions can you suggest to deal with this problem?
In the contemporary epoch, a high number of youngsters are making
use
of the internet
in order to meet and talk with friends through social media
. Many problems
have occurred in terms of children
such
as various kind
of health Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
problems
, connected with to express their emotional feelings and also
led to absence
of Add an article
the absence
an absence
the
face-to-face interaction. Correct article usage
apply
This
Change the determiner
This problem
These problems
problems
can be tackled by taking some measurements.
To begin
with, in over the world there are many people
who are making use
of internet
in order to solve their Correct article usage
the internet
problems
related to their work or education. So that is
the reason why everyone use
it until late hours which can Change the verb form
uses
led
to different Change the verb form
lead
kind
of health problems
such
spinal curvatures by sitting down a lot in front of the computers
and vision problems
by looking at the computers
. Secondly
, different kind
of Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
people
completely prefer
to meet others Change the verb form
prefers
in
the Change the preposition
on
internet
through social media
that
led to Correct pronoun usage
which
lack
of Correct article usage
a lack
the
face-to-face interaction. Correct article usage
apply
In other words
, thank to
Remove the preposition
apply
this
problem they are really suffering from to express
their emotional or other feelings in front Change the verb form
expressing
the
Change preposition
of the
computers
by talking unfamiliar
individuals. As a consequence, Change preposition
to unfamiliar
this
is causing them to loss
of interaction which is really important to express their feeling.
Replace the word
lose
On the other hand
, this
main Correct determiner usage
these
problems
can be tackled by parents who use
the internet
a lot. They can blocking
on websites Change the verb form
block
be blocking
which
Correct pronoun usage
that
children
do not connected
with it. Change the verb form
connect
Furthermore
, parents can offer their children
a surprise in return less making use
of internet
. Add an article
the internet
As a
result
Add a comma
,result
this
solution can be more
effective Correct article usage
a more
ways
to avoid youngsters looking at Fix the agreement mistake
way
to
the Change preposition
apply
computers
a lot. Another effective solution is for social
Add an article
a social
the social
media
company
to set up age limits for Fix the agreement mistake
companies
children
. For example
, Facebook recently updated its privacy policy that limits access to kids under the age of ten. Also
Whatsapp a major social media
app,
recently announced plans to unveil its messaging app for kids. Hopefully, Remove the comma
apply
this
would help to reduce a
number of young Change the article
the
people
who are bullied online since only teenagers will use
it.
To conclude, young people
use
the internet
to interact with different kind
of Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
people
online without any guidance and this
makes them really free and give self-confident to write others unethical messages. In order for
to be out of it, parents should keep an eye Change preposition
apply
their
communications and give necessary advice to their Change preposition
on their
children
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