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Bringing in foreign workers to fill positions that domestic workers are unwilling to do can cause problems in the local community and should therefore be stopped. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays employing foreign
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 in various areas
instead
 of locals become a heated topic. While some people are worried about
this
 issue, others including me believed that the merit of
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following
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 there are some
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 features of
this
 opinion. My
first
 justification has to do knowledge sharing. By Utilizing foreigners not only the work is finished as desired but
also
 others could learn and use their data in different cases by asking and looking to them.The immigrants
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could rise their wisdom
also
.Another ground is about expansion.Many companies established a new branch of
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their
the
 business in other places only by knowing a local person of that statement.If a superior get familiar with a guy who lives in another city or country, he would help him to get acquainted with the ins and pros and
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 work as he
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Further
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culture
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.
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 reading
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book
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 nor watching films can
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 you the culture of another nation.Due to that communicating and
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having
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 a proper
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cognition
recognition
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 reduce a lot of ambiguity. The main
worring
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worrying
working
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 over-dependence on them.At
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 regionals used to hire foreigners for small works just when they could not get out of it or did not have the appropriate equipment,
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where as
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, after a
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 they do not even bother themselves and
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 everything to others.In
this
 manner, if the country becomes boycott and nobody
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accept
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their
 request, they fail as follows marginal skills and
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. The other annoying issue is
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 of illegal workers.Some folks
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who
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 are not in a suitable situation in
thier
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their
 homeland,
they
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accept the risk of migrating illegally either by land or air to other locations.Many humans take
advantages
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 of
this
 opportunity to pay less for more
works
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. Owing to
this
 fact the number of criminal activities increases and the security decreases. To
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sum up
 what
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 above,
although
 there are some
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drawbacks
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draw backs
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, the advantages are outweighed.In my point of
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 cooperation brings significant circumstances.
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