Finding job satisfaction is considered to be a luxury in many developing countries. Why do you think that is? Do you think that job satisfaction is important?

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Nowadays, satisfactory jobs are really important in everyone's life .
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in developing
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it is counted as a luxurious thing. In my opinion ,
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agreed with the fact that it is very effective in humans
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position because it helps to keep their mental status satisfied. Apparently, there are myriad of reasons to get
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job
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as it is helpful in every folk to get tremendous benefits or to
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all their needs.
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and foremost, if they like their workplace
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they earn more and do their jobs in full interest which is helpful for the
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company's
economic growth.
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, like in housekeeping if people have
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they clean rooms in a proper manner which is helpful to increase the cleaning rating and
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will lead to
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more profit.
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helpful
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to keep the surrounding environment peaceful and calm and it
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encourage
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other persons to achieve a goal or
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others.
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satisfactions
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plays a vital role and it is beneficial in future when they are getting retired like after retirement if they are still interested
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they emphasised younger generation towards their goals and teach them that they need to choose
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according to their aim. Chiefly, it is
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good for adults to get
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according to their own interest. In my profound opinion, it is concluded that permanent and good
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change peoples life and they can survive without conflict and they will not
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feel
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embarrassed
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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