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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions.

#minutes #businesses #employees #lack #skills
Many employers have understood that their new
worker
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 are not good team
player
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players
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 and they suffer from
lack
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a lack
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 of interpersonal
skills
.I believe exploring the causes of
this
 problem can assist in finding a suitable solution to resolve it. Diffidence could partly
acount
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account
 for that workers failed to
commiunicate
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communicate
 with their
colleague
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. These days many
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employees do not have any special
skills
 and they are unable to solve the problems.
Consequently
, it could have several adverse effects on their
confident
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.To address
this
 issue ,
campanies
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companies
 should provide their new employers with some courses and classes in order to develop them as a skilled workforce. Recently, many big companies find it if they want to make
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 in their work they should develop special workforces . Because of not having experience ,
individual
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individuals
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 fail to meet their
managers
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manager's
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expectation
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 so it could be stressful and cause several
problem
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such
 as seclusion.
Lack
 of
skills
 and
experiement
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experiment
 can
also
 explain why people find it difficult to connect with their colleagues.From an industrial perspective , skilled and experienced workforces play a vital role in the
effiency
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efficiency
 of the companies .
Thus
 , when people are not able to work
such
 as their colleagues , the work can be
stressfull
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stressful
 for them.
Moreover
, they can not make a good connection with them. To conclude , even
tough
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lack
 of
self confident
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self-confident
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 and not being
skilled
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a skilled
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 person contribute to
lack
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a lack
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 of interpersonal
skills
. Companies can remedy the situation. In my
opinion
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 providing courses and developing people are steps in the right direction.
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