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Traffic congestion is a serious problem in most big cities. Some people believe that governments should build more roads. What do you think about this solution?

#traffic #congestion #cities #people #governments #roads
As
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it
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 well known, nowadays
cities
 are experimenting
population
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 growth which leads to different issues
such
 as overpopulation and
traffic
congestion
. To solve the problem of transport
congestion
, many
people
 claim that governments should build more
roads
. Behind
this
 argument, I consider that there are
others
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 alternatives to solve
this
 issue, but
first
 I will take a look at both sides of the question until to reach a conclusion. To start, I will not deny that building more
roads
 could be a good solution to
this
 matter. Due to a great transport
system
 and design, governments will correct the vehicles
congestion
 in the
cities
,
owing
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 that, there no will be more
traffic
 jams and
people
’s discontentment will decrease respect to
this
 problem.
In addition
,
better
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traffic
system
 will improve the accessibility between
cities
 and connection between
people
. Thanks to that, other small and medium
cities
 could experiment
population
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 growth which will drive to
economical
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 improvement of the area.
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 the other hand, the construction and improvement of
traffic
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system
also
has
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 some drawbacks.
Firstly
, there exist
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an impact
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impact
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 on
social
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 and natural environment.
In other words
, the construction of
roads
need
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 the acquisition of lands which will drive to
relocation
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the relocation
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 of residents and
destruction
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 of the environment. So,
people
 will have to reconstruct their lives in other areas which will affect their economical and social situation. What is more, landscape destruction can not be omitted. Some animal and vegetal species will disappear because of
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 of their habitat. In conclusion, from my point of view, a great
traffic
system
 will connect
people
 and
cities
, but
also
 will affect some families and push them to change their lives. Governments should consider
the
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both sides and apart from
erection
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the erection
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 of
roads
, improve public transportation and encourage
people
 to use it,
thus
 will decrease
traffic
congestion
 and pollution in the
cities
.
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